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Saw him singin his heart out
the other night
A dreamy deja vu
His voice box trapped me in
Making me feel loved but o so alone.
His eyes wandered over to meet mine
when they met mine they flashed closed
What is he thinking?
no one knows

When he held me
the world shattered around me
the stars became bombs raiding all innocent people
time spinning and twisting
our hearts unisonly ticking
seemed like an internity
our tears combined
formed an ocean of feelings
will it last ?
no one knows

He walks away
my throat goes numb
my eyes regergitate tears
run
run behind the building
pull out my pencil and erase my arms
try to erase away my past and present pain
why should i get my hopes up?
it only leaves scars on my arms and scars in my soul
Why shouldnt love just kill us?
No one knows...
©2005-2009 ~emochick1
:iconemochick1:

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this was about the other night.. sad.. its an ok poem, but whatever, critique it please

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:iconreina14:
oh wow. you are such a great poet! i like this one a lot

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your cute when you scream
:icontalulah618:
OMG paige i'm fucking loving it....its so beautiful and sad and the analogies are perfect...you really are a great poet, keep it up..in my opinion your just as good if not better than conor oberst :nod:

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The world I love
The tears I drop
To be part of
The wave can't stop
Ever wonder if it's all for you
Sweetheart is bleeding in the snowcone,So smart she's leading me to ozone
Music the great communicator, Use two sticks to make it in the nature
:iconemochick1:
thank you.. but i am nothing ever compared to my God connor! lol

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As I try to fill all of my empty days
I stumble round on through my memory's maze
:iconemochick1:
thank you so much

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As I try to fill all of my empty days
I stumble round on through my memory's maze
:iconfireman103:
awesome. totally, completly awesome

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writing down words, ryming in my head, i write down my mind, but my soul still feels dead - me
:iconfallen-princess:
really great writing. hope to see more from you soon :hug:

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...and if i'm not back in 5 minutes...wait longer!

"We shall bring the beauty of erotic poetry to the masses" :D
:iconemochick1:
thank you, i just put another poem up like yesterday lol you will have to critique it for me, please,, sorry,, byebye -paige

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As I try to fill all of my empty days
I stumble round on through my memory's maze
:iconemochick1:
Merci Bouque~ ( or however its spelled lol )

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As I try to fill all of my empty days
I stumble round on through my memory's maze

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